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2009-04-27 23:30:53

once again

Things you did great:
direction of the scenes and composition was well done. You used close ups and editing appropriately and the voices were very good! You also did lip sync and mouth replacement very effectively

Things you need to improve on:
You had something that potentially could be funny, but you really just used your humour in an obvious way, it wasn't really smart.
There also wasn't much animation to be found, your scene direction, art and close ups apparantly made up for this. Try to do something more sophisticated than an arm in a scratch loop. Also for the most part, the characters were completely still with just mouths moving.

The Red Ball

2009-04-27 23:25:35

this is a review

Although I enjoyed your story, I felt that it didn't really leave me with anything and it wasn't too original. It was interesting how you portrayed an object as going through the everyday life of humans, and viewing their emotions, but at the end you left us with nothing to think about, the ball just goes through it over and over. I think your story would have been better if it had entailed some impacting statement other 'human emotions are monotonous'

Also, i found your animation very dissapointing. Although I thought it was a rather nice idea to have the ball leave a red tail wherever it had been, I felt as though you did not put much effort into the actual artwork or animation (even though you spent almost a week on it). For instance, the clouds in the town scene were very sloppily drawn. The people also looked as though not a lot of effort was put into them. This is the main reason for my low rating, as this is a site to post flash animations.

I did enjoy the music though, it was a good song choice.
Overall, work on bettering your animation, art and add a little something to the story and it'll be a 10!

Kevin's Eighth February

2009-04-22 17:58:07

hmmmmmmmm

Well, I think you've got a great film in the making,
Some things that you need to work on:
timing and trimming the story, it was very long and the wait between scenes and dialogue was tiring.
Animation: there wasn't much of it here, you did have a few good movements down, but you should work on getting your characters' movements to flow naturally and less awkwardly.
Dialogue: dialogue shouldn't just describe what the viewer can see such as 'it's raining'. Dialogue like 'Oh, I lost again' is cute and more appropriate. Work on being more creative and punctual with what you say.

You did have a nice style and you did put a lot of thought into it, so props on that.
Would like to see more of your work in the future!

A* Episode 2

2009-04-22 17:47:52

keep truckin'

The style is great! You have a real eye for shadows, you are also very artistic.
Unfortunately, your story was very very slow and the sound quality was pretty bad. I was confused at times and even bored. Another thing is that your animation is usually just two frames. For example, speech is an open and closed mouth repeated.

I would work on cutting down the story and timing and improving your animation and I'd say that you've got something good going!

smbhax responds:

Oh, I don't want to cut down the story, it's the important part of A* for me. This episode was originally made without sound, and designed around giving people time to read subtitles, so that may be where your feeling of it being slow comes from. Starting with episode 3 I'm drawing them up for sound from the beginning, so that may start to change up the pacing. Thanks for the comment!

Update: Revamped the timing, should address the slowness and speech issues you raised (mouths are still two frames, but now actually in sync with the words throughout, which makes a big difference :). Thanks again for the comment, it was helpful!

Sketchy Friends Dance

2009-04-22 16:59:52

good enough pour moi

that is sketchy indeed!

TheBoogley responds:

well, feel free to pour yourself some more moi. :3

MovieMakers

2009-04-21 18:47:24

quality flash, better than most on this site

great animation and pretty punny, but a bit long.
the sound quality was also great and the voice acting was good also.

Fading Memories

2009-04-21 18:39:59

5/10

needs some improvement on the animation and the sound quality wasn't the greatest, I couldn't understand some of it. I also wasn't sure what happened when he tripped over the vine, but the suspense was well envisioned.
You did have a good soundtrack and the story seemed well put together to lead up to future episodes.
Overall, for me, the sad story didn't make up for the animation and sound, but I would like to see future episodes.

Dead2Animations responds:

Good review, I will try my best to make sure my future episodes are better quality and sound(need a better microphone) but the future episode will have much more and longer suspence and story.

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